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1、应用文精批精改8:祝贺信（课堂讲稿）题目展示：假如你是李华,你的好友魏芳在中学生英语演讲比赛中荣获一等奖。请你根据以下内容，给她 写一封祝贺信。内容包括：L表达你的愉悦心情；2.向她表示祝贺；3.请她介绍成功的经验。注意：1 .词数IOO左右；2.开头和结尾已为你写好，但不计入总词数；3.可适当增加细节， 以使行文连贯。参考词汇：英语演讲比赛the English Speech Contest审题“三步走”一审文体：祝贺信二数要点:三个：表达你的愉悦心情 向她表示祝贺 请她介绍成功的经验三.思时态与人称:时态f一般现在时学生作品展示：人称一第一人称应MMllj:a说论陀N the f际土 7次

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3、ve recently achieved the first prize in the English Speech Competition. 英语演讲比赛,已经给出英文翻译：the English Speech COnteSt;COmPetitiOn通常包括一系列的活动或事件。例如：体育比赛、销售竞赛、学业竞争等等;COnteSt通常是基于某种特定的技能 或才能。例如：写作比赛、歌唱比赛、烹饪比赛等等,更多地侧重于某个特定的比赛项目 一其它写法 1 Congratulations on winning the first prize in the English Speech Contest

4、!m absolutely thrilled for you.恭喜你在英语演讲比赛中获得第一名！我为你感到无比激动。其它写法 2:Wow, what fantastic news about your English Speech Contest success ! Congratulations on your first prize win.哇,你英语演讲比赛获胜的好消息太棒了！祝贺你赢得第一名。其它写法 3rm delighted to hear that your hard work and dedication have paid off with your recent first

5、 prize win in the English Speech ContesteCongratulations!我很高兴听到你近期在英语演讲比赛中的辛勤付出得到了回报，赢得了第一名。祝贺你！其它写法 4:Delighted to learn that you have won first prize in the English Speech Contest of Middle School Students, m writing to offer my congratulations to you.很高兴得知你在中学生英语演讲比赛中荣获了一等奖，我写这封信向你表示祝贺。第二段正文:良好的祝

6、愿+请她介绍成功的经验2. Upon hearing the message of you,I was amazed by your excellent ability for delivering a English speech.the message of you 改为 the message of yours 或 your message;ability 通常后面用不定式 作后置定语;a改为an一修改提升:UPOil hearing your message, I was amazed by your excellent ability to deliver an English sp

7、eech.一其它写法：I was astonished by your exceptional aptitude for presenting an English speech, as conveyed in your message.3. Thus,I, m wondering if you can offer me some useful experience on it,which will be of great benefit to me.这句话表达得很好,语法也没有问题.句子结构清晰明了,表达了想要获得对方经验分享的意愿，同 时也表达了对自己有益处的期望。其它写法 1 ： Im

8、curious if you could share with me any valuable insights on thismatter, as it would greatly benefit me.一其它写法 2:If you have any useful tips or advice on this topic, I would greatlyappreciate hearing them as they would be of immense value to me.4. If you are willing to do this,1, 11 gratefully lend my

9、 ears to your improvising skills and speech preparation tactics.如果你愿意分享经验和技巧,我很感激能够倾听你的即兴技巧和演讲准备策略;d。this改为do so, 前后句子更衔接.一修改提升:If you are willing to do so, 11 gratefully lend my ears to your improvising skills and speech preparation tactics.其它写法:If you are willing to do so, I would be grateful to l

10、isten and learn from your improvisation skills and speech preparation tactics.第三段:再次祝贺+期待回复5. Again congratulate for your great honor!BesidesjI anticipate your reply.congratulate for应该改为congratulations on; BeSideS表前后两句是并列关系,这里应该看 过渡,准备陈述另外一件事情，翻译为“此外”，所以需要用in addition, additionally, moreover 或 furth

11、ermoreo修改提升:COngratUlatioIlS again on your great honor! Additionally, I lookforward to your response.其它写法 1 Congratulations once more on your remarkable accomplishment! Additionally, I eagerly anticipate your reply.一其它写法 2:Once again, congratulations on your great honor! Furthermore, I anticipate yo

12、ur reply.修改精简后的文章完美呈现：m delighted to hear that your hard work and dedication have paid off with your recent first prize win in the English Speech Contest.Congratulations!Upon hearing your message, I was amazed by your excellent ability to deliver an English speech.Thus,I m wondering if you can offer

13、 me some useful experience on it,which will be of great benefit to me.If you are willing to take some time out of your schedule to do so, I would be more than grateful to lend my ears to your improvising skills and speech preparation tactics.Once again, congratulations on your well-deserved success!

14、 Furthermore, Ieagerly anticipate your reply.(105 words)翻译练习：第一段：1 .我非常高兴听到你在英语演讲比赛中最近荣获一等奖的好消息。祝贺你!第二段：2 .收到你的消息后，我对你出色的英语演讲能力十分惊叹。3 .因此，我想知道你是否可以给我一些有用的经验，这对我将会大有裨益。4 .如果你愿意抽出时间来分享你的即兴技巧和演讲准备策略，我将不胜感激o5 .再次祝贺你当之无愧的成功，期待你的回复。范文呈现：Dear Wei Fang,1 hear that you have won first prize in the English Spe

15、ech Contest of Middle School Students, so 1, m writing to give my sincere congratulations.You don, t know how excited 1 was when 1 heard the good news. As your best friend, 1 am proud of you ! Your pronunciation and fluent English left me with deep impression.lt came as no surprise to me that you won the contest.Could you share with me how you improve your spoken English? Your experience will be of great help to me in learning.1 will be grateful if you can write me back and give me your advice. 1 am looking forward to your early reply.Yours,Li Hua祝贺信相关拓展1假定你是李华，你的美籍好友Tom在他所在学校组织的汉字听写大赛中获得了